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Kenneth~Holly
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Posts : 429
Join date : 2010-09-19
Age : 27
Location : Mount Olympus
| Subject: Comments on my Sucky Story :P  Tue Sep 28, 2010 6:16 pm | |
| Constructive critiscism prefered, but tell me what you think of it.. Bad or good. | |
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Duke~Carmen
Posts : 136
Join date : 2010-09-26
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Tue Sep 28, 2010 6:56 pm | |
| It has a good plot idea but you need to make it more complex. It seems too simple. | |
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Kenneth~Holly
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Posts : 429
Join date : 2010-09-19
Age : 27
Location : Mount Olympus
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 4:58 am | |
| *facepalm* That was the prologue........ XD It's SUPPOSED to be simple.. | |
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Duke~Carmen
Posts : 136
Join date : 2010-09-26
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 2:33 pm | |
| Still aprologue needs more suspense and action to give eraders what will ahppen. add some of that in. | |
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Malayna~Adam
Posts : 55
Join date : 2010-09-23
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 2:45 pm | |
| That was really good! I can't wait to read the next part. | |
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Aaron~Amy
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Posts : 271
Join date : 2010-09-23
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 2:56 pm | |
| - Duke Devlin wrote:
- Still aprologue needs more suspense and action to give eraders what will ahppen. add some of that in.
Dude, that Prolouge was perfect. I doubt i could've done better. Only comment is that it could've been a bit longer. | |
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Duke~Carmen
Posts : 136
Join date : 2010-09-26
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 3:39 pm | |
| - Aaron~Amy wrote:
- Duke Devlin wrote:
- Still aprologue needs more suspense and action to give eraders what will ahppen. add some of that in.
Dude, that Prolouge was perfect. I doubt i could've done better. Only comment is that it could've been a bit longer. Still in your opinion it was perfect. Not that it may have not been but its good to give constructive crticism if thats what hes asking for. | |
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Kenneth~Holly
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Posts : 429
Join date : 2010-09-19
Age : 27
Location : Mount Olympus
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 3:59 pm | |
| Thank you EVERYONE, including Duke. I will try to do better in the next parts, and make it longer. | |
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Aaron~Amy
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Posts : 271
Join date : 2010-09-23
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 4:02 pm | |
| Longer means sooner hopefully. I love reading books, but the wait is annoying >.> | |
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Duke~Carmen
Posts : 136
Join date : 2010-09-26
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: Comments on my Sucky Story :P Wed Sep 29, 2010 4:05 pm | |
| Yeah me too. i like reading books, any kind really. If Barnes and Nobles had TV, food than I could live in there till I die.
Btw Moon that Hecate drawing you drew a while back is really good. i like how you had the eyes in the background really good. When I draw my god drawings I may figure out a way to post it on here. | |
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